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The chart below shows the distribution of different income groups in cities and regional centres of Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the distribution of different income groups in cities and regional centres of Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the percentages of various income
category
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categories
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 in
cities
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 and regional centres of Australia.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that
middle
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 and lower
middle
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groups
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 are the highest in both
cities
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 and regional centres.
However
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, the low and the high categories are the lowest
also
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 in both
cities
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 and regional centres. The biggest percentage of all
groups
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 is
middle
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 in
cities
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.
According to
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 what is shown in
cities
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, the proportion of
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middle
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the middle
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 class is 35 per
cent
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,
it
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which
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 is the highest,
while
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 the percentage of
lower
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the lower
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middle
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 is less than the
middle
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groups
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 by 5 per
cent
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. The proportions of low and high
groups
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 are around 13 per
cent
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 and 20 per
cent
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 respectively.
Additionally
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, In
regional
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region
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, the proportion of lower
middle
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groups
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 is around 35 per
cent
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 and it is similar to the percentage of the
middle
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 group in
cities
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, it is the biggest among all classes.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cities, middle, groups, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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