A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. HelShe has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter Explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holliday Describe some possible disadvantages Say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
Dear Friend,
I am glad to hear about your
a
nice decision. I try to Correct article usage
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say
some useful Verb problem
give
advices
.
It depends Change the wording
advice
pieces of advice
bits of advice
the
costs are your how many people Change preposition
on the
incleded
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included
with
your team and how long time you can spendChange preposition
in
a
holiday trip.
You have to Change preposition
on a
considered
,three important things before you go Change the verb
consider
to
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on
the
travel.
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Firstly
, You have to try for
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minimalist
. Because the campsite has to easy fold and bring move.Add an article
the minimalist
a minimalist
Most
important is your food and clothes, Did you know the brand FAJIN? their clothes are so comfortable, soft, light, Correct article usage
The most
also
warm.For food, better
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a better
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suggest you a vegetable and a fruit. Also
don't
forget put
the safety matches, mosquito spray and flashlight in the bag.
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to put
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what kind of car have you chosen? my
opinion, your old car is Change preposition
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incovinent
. if you have possible, you can choose more safety, and comfortable. The local road was very badCorrect your spelling
inconvenient
,
when I Remove the comma
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had
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apply
traveled
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travelled
last
summer. oh, don't
forget
check the Add the particle
forget to
tires
of Change the spelling
tyres
car
.
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the car
a car
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, you need to
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apply
couldn'
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any
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be any
ATM
, banks..
Have I safe trip.Fix the agreement mistake
ATMs
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coherence cohesion
To improve your letter’s coherence, it would be beneficial to organize your ideas more logically. Start with a clear introduction, followed by paragraphs that each focus on a single idea, and end with a concise closing paragraph.
task achievement
You should revise your language to more accurately reflect a friendly yet formal tone. Use complete sentences and avoid overly informal language to adhere to the writing task’s requirements.
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Provide more detailed explanations to fully accomplish the task. For instance, when describing possible disadvantages, discuss more specific scenarios or potential issues.
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Your intention to provide practical advice is clear and shows your concern for your friend's well-being.
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Including personal experience makes your advice more relatable and convincing.
The Closing
The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.
Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.
Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)
- Yours faithfully,
Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)
- Yours sincerely,
Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)
- Best regards,
- Warm wishes,