A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. HelShe has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter Explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holliday Describe some possible disadvantages Say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

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Dear Friend, I am glad to hear about your
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nice decision. I try to
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give
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some useful
advices
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advice
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. It depends
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costs are your how many people
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included
with
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your team and how long time you can spend
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holiday trip. You have to
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,three important things before you go
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travel.
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minimalist
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. Because the campsite has to easy fold and bring move.
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important is your food and clothes, Did you know the brand FAJIN? their clothes are so comfortable, soft, light,
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warm.For food,
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a better
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choice would be canned, bottled, and vacuum packaged. I don'
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suggest you a vegetable and a fruit.
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don'
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forget
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the safety matches, mosquito spray and flashlight in the bag.
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what kind of car have you chosen?
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opinion, your old car is
incovinent
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inconvenient
. if you have possible, you can choose more safety, and comfortable. The local road was very bad
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when I
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traveled
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last
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summer. oh, don'
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forget
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check the
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of
car
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the car
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.
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, you need
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some cash. perhaps in the countryside
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there couldn't
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t
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any
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ATM
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, banks.. Have I safe trip.
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coherence cohesion
To improve your letter’s coherence, it would be beneficial to organize your ideas more logically. Start with a clear introduction, followed by paragraphs that each focus on a single idea, and end with a concise closing paragraph.
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You should revise your language to more accurately reflect a friendly yet formal tone. Use complete sentences and avoid overly informal language to adhere to the writing task’s requirements.
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Provide more detailed explanations to fully accomplish the task. For instance, when describing possible disadvantages, discuss more specific scenarios or potential issues.
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Your intention to provide practical advice is clear and shows your concern for your friend's well-being.
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Including personal experience makes your advice more relatable and convincing.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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