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The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000.

The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000.
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This
grpah
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graph
graphic
 illustrates the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. There are four types of transport ways :
bus
, car, bike and
foot
.
Overall
,
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the car
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car
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cars
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 had an
increasement
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increase
 but walking and using
bike
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a bike
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 had
an
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a
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decreasement
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decreased
 during the given
peirod
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period
. And
useness
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useless
 of
bus
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buses
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 rose in 1980 but
it
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they
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 declined in 2000. In 1960, people usually walked when they
go
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went
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 to other places. The figure
of
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for
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foot
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feet
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 is 35, compared to figures
of
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for
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 other modes of moving are below 30.
However
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 after 20 years, the frequency of using
bus
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the bus
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 was the highest among
4
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the 4
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categories. And
numerical
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the numerical
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 value of going by
foot
 dropped under 20. At
last
, in 2000, the most popular transport method was
car
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a car
the car
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, which had over 35
figure
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figures
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.
Bus
 and
foot
 followed
next,
and
bike
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the bike
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 was the lowest one. As technology was developed,
popular
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the popular
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 moving method
also
 changed.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bus, foot with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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