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The bar chart below shows the average duration of housework women did (unemployed, part-time employed and full-time) when compared to men who had full-time work in the UK between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the average duration of housework women did (unemployed, part-time employed and full-time) when compared to men who had full-time work in the UK between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph depicts the average
hours
 spent on
housework
 in the UK between 1985 and 2005. There are four categories : three types of
women
 who
is
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are
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 unemployed, part-
time
 employed ,full-
time
 employed and a type of full-
time
men
 worker.
Overall
,
efforted
Verb problem
the amount of
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time
 on
housework
of
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by
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 not working
women
 was the highest during the given period. And
housework
hours
 of
women
 who have a job
,
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apply
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 fluctuated with
a
Correct article usage
the
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 same trend.
In addition
,
meaningful
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a meaningful
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 change
of
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in
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men
 employers was that they tried to help their
wife
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wives
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 more, as
time
goes
Wrong verb form
went
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 by.
Women
 who didn't have a job had lots of free
time
,
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apply
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 so
that
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apply
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they
can
Wrong verb form
could
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 spend 6~7
hours
into
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apply
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cleaning, cooking, etc.
However
, career
men
 didn't do much at home from 1985 to 1995. They only spent 1 hour. Even though
,
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apply
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 the figures for
men
 increased to 1.5
hours
 in 2005, it is too short.
Women
 who are
part
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part-time
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time
 and
full
Add a hyphen
full-time
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time
 employers put less effort
on
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into
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housework
 in 1995, compared to 1985, but it increased in 2005.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, housework, women, men, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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