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Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. While others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packing. Discuss both views and give your opinions. Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

#people #manufacturers #supermarkets #responsibility #amount #goods #customers #answers
There are common
belief
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such
 as
to
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apply
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decreasing
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the guantity
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guantity
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quantity
 of packaged food should implemented side of the producers and sellers of
a
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products
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products
.
While others
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Others
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, including
me
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me,
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 think that it mostly relied on
comsumers
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consumers
 of the
products
 as they can
simple
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simply
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 hold buycot for
these kind
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this kind
these kinds
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 of
goods
.
To begin
 with,
manufactures
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manufacturers
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 and supermarkets
has
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have
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 huge power to
redusing
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reduce
spreading
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the spreading
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 of
paceged
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packaged
goods
. In the production stage producers of the
good
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goods
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 may integrate new technologies that will
helps
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help
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 to avoid using packing for the
products
.
Selling
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 stage
also
 can
cotribute
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contribute
this
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 development by
require
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requiring
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 their
costumers
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customers
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bring
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to bring
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 their own bags
while
 they in shopping.
For example
,
in
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many developed countries
has
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have
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 already started using
this
 method in their supermarkets and malls.
Costumers
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Customers
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bring
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who bring
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 their own bags for their shopping can even get special discounts from supermarket management.
On the other hand
, in every trade industry
comsumers
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consumers
is
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are
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 the most powerful force
to
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when it comes to changing anything.
Comsumer
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Consumer
Consumers
 can
effect
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affect
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packaging
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the packaging
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 of
product
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products
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 by
simple
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simply
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 not buying
such
as
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apply
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goods
. Any kind of production organisation will
collapce
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collapse
 without people who buy their
products
.
For instance
, we witnessed more than one time
comsumers
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consumers
anaunced
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announced
buycot
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buycott
boycott
 to unhealthy foods and drinks like coca-cola and
fastfood
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fast food
.
This
 act forced to
coca-cola
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Coca-Cola
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 company to change its production system and
geve
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give
gave
public
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the public
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 new alternative cola without sugar.
To conclude
, despite the fact that
pruduction
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production
 and selling organisations have power over
wether
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whether
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goods
 should be packaged or not, without
costumers
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customers
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 acceptance no one product will not able to be profitable.
Submitted by Teo Halimov on

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grammar
Review grammar and spelling errors, such as 'buyers' instead of 'buycot', and correct punctuation.
development
Add further development to your main points and examples, particularly for the first body paragraph.
structuring
Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea. For instance, discuss the role of manufacturers in one paragraph and consumers in another.
structuring
A clear introduction and conclusion are present.
content
The essay discusses both sides of the argument, which satisfies one of the main criteria.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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