More and more qualified people are moving from poor to rich countries to fill vacancies in specialist areas like engineering, computing and medicine. Some people believe that by encouraging the movement of such people, rich countries are stealing from poor countries. Others feel that this is only part of the natural movement of workers around the world.

It is well-known that currently the poor population with less resources but
also
with enough knowledge,
such
as engineering, computing and medicine, prefers to live in another place with better life quality. I agree with the idea
to improve
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your way
to
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live
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and
have
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new experiences moving from your native
country
. On the one hand, some people believe that
this
movement means that poor countries are being stolen. That might be because if the most qualified
persons
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are leaving their place, their
country
will get poorer. The solution might be
from
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the Government
by helping
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them,
for instance
, by increasing their salary or with a new law with which the emigrants should pay some tax to their
country
.
On the other hand
, others claim the emigration movement
as
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a natural movement for all workers
over
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the world, because the world is so huge, and
plein
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filled
with opportunities.
Therefore
, we do not have the obligation to stay in the same place,
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the change is a healthy way to learn more and feel more satisfied.
For example
, jobs
such
as engineer and doctor, are more well-paid in certain cities.
Consequently
, they take part of these advantages, and everyone should support it. In conclusion, taking
advantages
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and opportunities is part of our lives, and we should be aware of living how we wish,
instead
of thinking about the richness of our
country
, because
this
is part of its Government.
As a result
, I agree with the emigration idea
like
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a natural change.
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