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More and more qualified people are moving from poor to rich countries to fill vacancies in specialist areas like engineering, computing and medicine. Some people believe that by encouraging the movement of such people, rich countries are stealing from poor countries. Others feel that this is only part of the natural movement of workers around the world.

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It is well-known that currently the poor population with less resources but
also
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 with enough knowledge,
such
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 as engineering, computing and medicine, prefers to live in another place with better life quality. I agree with the idea
to improve
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 your way
to
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live
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 and
have
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 new experiences moving from your native
country
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. On the one hand, some people believe that
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 movement means that poor countries are being stolen. That might be because if the most qualified
persons
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 are leaving their place, their
country
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 will get poorer. The solution might be
from
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 the Government
by helping
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 them,
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, by increasing their salary or with a new law with which the emigrants should pay some tax to their
country
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.
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, others claim the emigration movement
as
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was
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 a natural movement for all workers
over
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 the world, because the world is so huge, and
plein
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filled
 with opportunities.
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, we do not have the obligation to stay in the same place,
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moreover
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 the change is a healthy way to learn more and feel more satisfied.
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, jobs
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 as engineer and doctor, are more well-paid in certain cities.
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, they take part of these advantages, and everyone should support it. In conclusion, taking
advantages
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 and opportunities is part of our lives, and we should be aware of living how we wish,
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 of thinking about the richness of our
country
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, because
this
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 is part of its Government.
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, I agree with the emigration idea
like
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 a natural change.

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task achievement
To enhance task response, ensure that you address both sides of the argument equally and provide a more balanced discussion. Additionally, offering more specific details and examples can strengthen your points.
coherence cohesion
While the essay flows fairly well, some improvements in logical structure could enhance coherence and cohesion. Breaking down the arguments into more distinct paragraphs may clarify the points being made, and using clear transitional phrases can assist in connecting ideas more smoothly.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are clear and provide a good overview of the essay's main arguments and final stance.
task achievement
The essay demonstrates a clear understanding of the topic, and the ideas presented are relevant to the discussion on migration and its impacts.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Brain drain
  • Globalization
  • Skilled workforce
  • Socioeconomic growth
  • Economic disparity
  • Specialist areas
  • Free market of skills
  • Immigration policies
  • Labor market
  • Talent attraction
  • Professional development
  • Remittances
  • Economic incentives
  • Knowledge transfer
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