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The charts below show the favourite takeaways of people in Canada and the number ofIndian restaurants in Canada between 1960 and 2015.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and makecomparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the favourite takeaways of people in Canada and the number ofIndian restaurants in Canada between 1960 and 2015.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and makecomparisons where relevant.
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The pie
chart
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 compares the information about the popularity of takeout
food
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 in Canada, and the bar
chart
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 reveals a range of
Indian
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restaurants
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 in the same country from 1960 to 2015.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 most customers prefer to order Asian
food
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 as a delivery, and there was a general upward trend opened
Indian
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restaurants
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 in Canada during the whole period.
According to
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 the pie
chart
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, the percentage of Chinese
food
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 accounted for the largest proportion (34%). The second largest portion belonged to
Indian
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food
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, taking up 26% of the total.
In contrast
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, there was the lowest
number
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 of Mexican
food
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 (1%), matching
by
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Japan and Greece. Next comes the remainder of
categories
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the categories
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, occupying a part of the proportion. Based on the bar
chart
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, the figure for
Indian
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restaurants
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 stood at about 500 in 1960, which was the lowest
number
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 of
restaurants
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 in Canada.
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, the
number
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 of
restaurants
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 soars dramatically to 9000, and it peaks at its highest point in 2009. After
which
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, there was a slight decrease
the
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in the
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number
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 of
restaurants
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 in 2011, with approximately 8500 shops.
Conversely
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, the trend was generally increased in 2015.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, food, indian, restaurants, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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