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The charts below show the favourite takeaways of people in Canada and the number ofIndian restaurants in Canada between 1960 and 2015.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and makecomparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the favourite takeaways of people in Canada and the number ofIndian restaurants in Canada between 1960 and 2015.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and makecomparisons where relevant.
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The pie
chart
 compares the information about the popularity of takeout
food
 in Canada, and the bar
chart
 reveals a range of
Indian
restaurants
 in the same country from 1960 to 2015.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 most customers prefer to order Asian
food
 as a delivery, and there was a general upward trend opened
Indian
restaurants
 in Canada during the whole period.
According to
 the pie
chart
, the percentage of Chinese
food
 accounted for the largest proportion (34%). The second largest portion belonged to
Indian
food
, taking up 26% of the total.
In contrast
, there was the lowest
number
 of Mexican
food
 (1%), matching
by
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Japan and Greece. Next comes the remainder of
categories
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the categories
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, occupying a part of the proportion. Based on the bar
chart
, the figure for
Indian
restaurants
 stood at about 500 in 1960, which was the lowest
number
 of
restaurants
 in Canada.
In contrast
, the
number
 of
restaurants
 soars dramatically to 9000, and it peaks at its highest point in 2009. After
which
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, there was a slight decrease
the
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in the
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number
 of
restaurants
 in 2011, with approximately 8500 shops.
Conversely
, the trend was generally increased in 2015.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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