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The graph below gives information about how much people in the United States and the United Kingdom spend on petrol. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about how much people in the United States and the United Kingdom spend on petrol. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates how much
people
 in the United States and the United Kingdom spend on petrol. The graph is divided into 3 categories of
class
 : poorest, middle-income,
richest
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and richest
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.
Overall
, the trend
of
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between
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United
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the United
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 States and
United
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the United
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 Kingdom is
opposite
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the opposite
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. In the US, as
people
 can earn more money, the usage of
fuel
 goes down.
Conversly
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Conversely
, in the UK, rich
people
 use
fuel
 more than poor
people
. The lowest
class
 in
US
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the US
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 spend 4% of their income on
fuel
.
In addition
, in the poorest group, the highest percentage of
fuel
 usage is over 5%.
However
,
portion
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a portion
the portion
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 of using petrol
is keep
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keeps
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 going down, when the
class
 is getting higher. The richest
people
 only use less than 3% of their
earness
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earnings
.
On the other hand
,
UK's
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the UK's
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 trend is totally different. The poorest
people
 in
UK
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the UK
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 almost don't use
fuel
. Rather, the highest usage of
fuel
 is
showed
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shown
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on
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in
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 the middle-income
class
 and rich
class
. They are spending 3~4% of their income.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, class, fuel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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