Some people think that city governments should spend more money to promote bicycle use in cities. Other, however, believe that cities should focus on investing in public transportation system like trains or buses. Discuss both views and give you opinion.

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last

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two or three decades, the

transportation

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sector has been

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revolutionised

tremendously more than ever before. A certain number of people consider that the

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should allocate more capital to encourage

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use in metropolitan places

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others say that towns should concentrate on investing in public

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such

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as trains or

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buses

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essay discusses both viewpoints and I strongly agree with the former opinion for the following reasons. On the one hand,

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the city

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ministry should spend more

funds

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on improving

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users because

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this vehicle

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these vehicles

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can reduce

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environmental problems like

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pollution

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, the local authorities should expand more

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lanes

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, and it should connect all roads by investing more capital to develop

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according to

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the statistics,

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use

would increase,

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pollution

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would be Merened tremendously.

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, the

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should invest more

funds

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to improve

bicycle

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lanes

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along with

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users.

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, public

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should

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more capital to improve.

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is, buses and trains carry more passengers in just one vehicle than cars and

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another vehicle

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; public

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not only

carry

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more passengers but

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goods simultaneously.

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air

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pollution

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would be diminished,

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start

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started

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to use public

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transportation

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rather than

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cars because 15%

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air

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of air

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pollution

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has decreased

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used

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public

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. Needless to say, the

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should build subways, metro railways and high roads by investing more capital in order to

improves

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it's

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quality and quantity. In conclusion,

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bicycle

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paths and

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should be improved by the

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funds

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that

leads

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lead

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to reduce

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pollution

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, public

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should

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apply

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funds

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from the

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ruling

party in order to

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subways, highways, and metro railways.

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, in my opinion, the ministry should spend more money to improve

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users

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bicycle

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lanes

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and paths.

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Grammar

Work on sentence structure and grammar to avoid small errors, such as 'tremendously more than ever before' (should be 'more than ever before') and 'merened' (should be 'reduced').

Coherence and Cohesion

Try to use more connecting words and phrases to improve the flow of ideas between paragraphs and sentences, making the essay more cohesive.

Evidence and Examples

Delve deeper into providing relevant specific examples to support your points. For instance, provide data or examples of cities that have successfully implemented the measures discussed.

Task Achievement

The essay addresses both viewpoints and provides a clear opinion which is well done.

Coherence and Cohesion

The essay is generally logical and structured which helps in maintaining a clear line of argumentation.

Lexical Resource

Vocabulary and expressions used are appropriate for the context of academic writing.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

304 words

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