You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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line graph illustrates the average monthly change in the prices of metals during 2014. There are three kinds of metals in the graph which are Copper, Nickel and Zinc.

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, all three lines fluctuated a lot during

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year.

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, there is a similar trend

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here. Until June, a percentage

changness

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change

changes

price

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compared with

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month, keep decreasing. After June, it increased a little bit and

keep

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that figure until

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September

. From September to October, the gap with

prior

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month declined, but it rose after October. Nickel's trend is the most

fluctuated

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trend among

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them. In January, the

price

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rose 6% more than December

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2013.

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apply

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In June, the

price

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dropped

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by 3

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% compared to the

price

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May. Copper's

price

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increased

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by 3

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% in February but it declined

unitl

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until

October and

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it surged 2% more at

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then

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the

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end of 2014. The gap with

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year

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December of Nickel was 2%, and it recovered in December

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2014.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words price with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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5 paragraphs

160 words

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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

Alternative energy sources that use the natural power of the wind, wave and sun are too expensive and complicated to replace the coal, oil and gas that we use to power our cities and transport. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Some people think that governments should do more to make their citizens eat a healthy diet. Others believe that individuals must take responsibility for their own diet and health. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people think that finding a job satisfaction is considered the most important thing for the young generation nowadays. Do you agree or disagree with this viewpoint?

in many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. some people say an aging population creates problems for governments. other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly pepole.