You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
This
line graph illustrates the average monthly change in the prices of metals during 2014. There are three kinds of metals in the graph which are Copper, Nickel and Zinc.
Overall
, all three lines fluctuated a lot during
a
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the
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year.
However
, there is a similar trend
in
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here. Until June, a percentage
changness
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change
changes
in
price
compared with
previous
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month, keep decreasing. After June, it increased a little bit and
keep
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kept
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that figure until
Sepetember
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September
. From September to October, the gap with
prior
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the prior
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month declined, but it rose after October. Nickel's trend is the most
fluctuated
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trend among
of
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them. In January, the
price
rose 6% more than December
,
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2013.
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In June, the
price
dropped
3
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by 3
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% compared to the
price
of
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in
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May. Copper's
price
increased
3
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by 3
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% in February but it declined
unitl
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until
October and
then
it surged 2% more at
then
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the
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end of 2014. The gap with
last
year
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year's
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December of Nickel was 2%, and it recovered in December
,
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2014.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words price with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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