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The pie charts show the spending habits of citizens in UK in 1971 and 2001. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.

The pie charts show the spending habits of citizens in UK in 1971 and 2001. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.
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The given pie charts compare information about the percentage of spending habits on 7 different items in 2 various years( 1971 and 2001). It is obvious, that in the first
year
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year,
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food
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 and
cars
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 were important things that people spent money on;
however
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, in the second year
cars
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 and
food
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 changed their position.
According to
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 the 1971 diagram, dishes the first item that people spent money on had 44%;
moreover
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, the second one was
cars
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 which the number of were half of the
food
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;
then
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 other categories except
computers
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 had roughly the same proportion;
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,
finally
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,
computers
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 which was the
last
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 one had 2 per cent. The plot of 2001 illustrates the figure for all things reduced except
cars
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, restaurants, and
computers
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. the car percentage climbed to nearly the same as
food
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 in 1971;
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,
food
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 declined to 14% which was equal to the amount of restaurants.
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,
computers
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 had a 10% rise, yet furniture, petrol, and books respectively1%, 2%, and 5% fell.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, cars, computers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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