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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The graph depicts the proportion of
exports
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 from Australia to Japan, the United States,
China
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, and India between 1990 and 2021.
Overall
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, it is readily apparent that
Australian
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exports
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 to
China
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 and the United States experienced a decline,
while
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 the volume of
Australian
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exports
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 to
China
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 and India increased over the same period. In the beginning, Japan was the top
Australian
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 product importer, having over a quarter of the country's total
exports
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 as made-in-Australia.
However
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, the amount gradually declined to 20% in 1995 and approximately 18% in 2000 and 2005 before levelling off at 15% in 2010 until 2012.
Similarly
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, the
Australian
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-imported products in the US had a downward trend, as around 10% share of
this
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 country's imported products came from Australia, and the figure fluctuated and plummeted to 5% in 2010; despite the fall, it was able to rise the figure to around 5%
at the end
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 of the period.
On the contrary
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,
China
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 and India imported the lowest proportion of
Australian
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 commodities, with less than 5% of both countries' imports coming from Australia.
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, toward the end of the period, these two countries experienced an upward trend.
China
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 had a drastic jump in the proportion of
Australian
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-imported products in the country, surpassing Japan in 2007, and peaked at just under 30% in 2012.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words exports, china, australian with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • percentages
  • exports
  • trend
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • fluctuations
  • stable
  • economic ties
  • demand
  • decline
  • recovery
  • policy changes
  • trade relationship
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • temporary surge
  • specific events
  • incentives
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