Some people think that exams are a good way of assessing a student’s level. Other peopl e believe that they put unnecessary pressure on young learners and tell us very little about their actual ability. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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are
great
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way to determine student’s
level
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levels

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.
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it is a commonly held belief that
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are a significant way
for
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assessing a student’s level , there is
also
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an argument that opposes it , other people
believes
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that giving
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to young learners will put them under
a
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massive pressure .
This
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essay will analyse
this
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topic from both points of view and express my
opinon
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opinion

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. On one hand ,
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improve
the
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students
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in
a
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apply

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various ways
such
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as
,
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lifelong learning and
their
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personal growth .
In other words
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, putting the
students
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under
a
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pressure will improve their skills in solving quizzes .
On
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In

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other
words
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words,

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the role of technology is a vital source
in
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of

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education because
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the teacher
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teacher
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teachers

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can
make
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take

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the
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exams
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online
for assisting
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to assist

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students
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that
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who

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having
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have

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a stress
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stressful

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circumstances .
For
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example
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example,

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quizzes allow
students
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to build
a powerful interpersonal relationships
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powerful interpersonal relationships
a powerful interpersonal relationship

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with their teachers .
On the other hand
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,
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is
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are

The singular verb is does not appear to agree with the plural subject exams. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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causing
a significant issues
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significant issues
a significant issue

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in
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Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

students
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students'
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health, teachers must
taught
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teach
be taught

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students
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how to
promot
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promote

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a healthy lifestyles
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healthy lifestyles
a healthy lifestyle

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rather than, destroying their minds . It is
also
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possible to say that giving them a
giant
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large

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amount of
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will lead to devastating their ethical behaviour .
Moreover
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,improving the type of
learing
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learning

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in schools will
led
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lead

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the
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to be more energetic and genius .
For
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instance
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instance,

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chinese
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Chinese

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education
are
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restricting quizzes in schools and that led the
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and
country
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to be more modern and developed . In conclusion , there are no easy answers to
this
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question . On balance ,
however
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, I tend to believe that restricting the
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are inferior idea for
students
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because it will not lead them to improve their skills in their personal life .

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grammar
Ensure subject-verb agreement. For instance, 'giving exams to the students are' should be 'giving exams to the students is''.
coherence
Improve transitions between points to enhance logical flow. For instance, better linking phrases could be used between paragraphs and sentences.
ideas
Expand and clarify ideas to ensure clear comprehension. Some statements can be vague or underdeveloped, such as 'improving the type of learning in schools.'
task achievement
The writer presents both sides of the argument, which is essential for a balanced discussion.
coherence
The essay is well-structured with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, making it easy to follow.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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