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Some people think that exams are a good way of assessing a student’s level. Other peopl e believe that they put unnecessary pressure on young learners and tell us very little about their actual ability. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There is no denying the fact that giving
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students
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great
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 way to determine student’s
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.
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 it is a commonly held belief that
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 assessing a student’s level , there is
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 an argument that opposes it , other people
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 that giving
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 to young learners will put them under
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massive pressure .
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 topic from both points of view and express my
opinon
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opinion
. On one hand ,
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students
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various ways
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 lifelong learning and
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personal growth .
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 , putting the
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pressure will improve their skills in solving quizzes .
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 the role of technology is a vital source
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 education because
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the teacher
a teacher
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teacher
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 can
make
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take
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the
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exams
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for assisting
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students
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that
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having
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a stress
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 circumstances .
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 quizzes allow
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 to build
a powerful interpersonal relationships
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 with their teachers .
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 ,
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 causing
a significant issues
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significant issues
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 in
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students
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 health, teachers must
taught
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students
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 how to
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promote
a healthy lifestyles
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healthy lifestyles
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 rather than, destroying their minds . It is
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 amount of
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 will lead to devastating their ethical behaviour .
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 ,improving the type of
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learning
 in schools will
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 the
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 to be more energetic and genius .
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chinese
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 restricting quizzes in schools and that led the
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 to be more modern and developed . In conclusion , there are no easy answers to
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 question . On balance ,
however
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 , I tend to believe that restricting the
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 are inferior idea for
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 because it will not lead them to improve their skills in their personal life .

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grammar
Ensure subject-verb agreement. For instance, 'giving exams to the students are' should be 'giving exams to the students is''.
coherence
Improve transitions between points to enhance logical flow. For instance, better linking phrases could be used between paragraphs and sentences.
ideas
Expand and clarify ideas to ensure clear comprehension. Some statements can be vague or underdeveloped, such as 'improving the type of learning in schools.'
task achievement
The writer presents both sides of the argument, which is essential for a balanced discussion.
coherence
The essay is well-structured with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, making it easy to follow.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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