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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodations in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodations in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011
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The chart provides information about the proportion of
families
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 in owned and costed houses in
UK
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the UK
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 and Wales from 1918 to 2017 
Overall
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,
families
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 in owned houses experienced an upward trend
while
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 in costed chambers showed a downward trend .
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 ,both illustrated fluctuations over the period.  In 1918 ,about 22%
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families
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of families
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 in aik and Wales were living in their possessed homes . Proportion remained constant from 1939 to 1953 accounting for 33% .
Percentage
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The percentage
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 of
families
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 in owned quarters rosed about 10% in each decade between 1961 and 1991 .
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, it experienced a downward trend
at the end
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 of
period
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 recorded as 35%. The proportion of people
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who lived
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lived
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live
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 in costed quarters was about 78% in 1918.
Ratio
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The ratio
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 of individuals stayed steady from 1939 to 1953 amounting to 60% .It experienced a decline in
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the ratio
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 in
next
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the next
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 decades till 2011 . Eventually,
percentage
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the percentage
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 of
families
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 in rented accommodations enhanced to 38% in 2011
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Vocabulary: Replace the words families with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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