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The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The flow chart provides key information about the stages involved in the production of instant
noodles
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Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that the instant
noodles
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 manufacturing process is a complex, multi-stage procedure starting from mixing raw ingredients and ending with labelling and sealing of the product.
In addition
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, the initial steps focus on mixing the flour with other ingredients,
whereas
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 the latter stages involve a series of
further
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 cooking and spicing.
According to
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 what is shown, the first step includes transferring the flour from the track to the storagesilos.
Then
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, the flour is mixed with oil
as well as
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 water by using the mixer. The new mixer is transferred to dough sheets by using rollers. In terms of making the
noodles
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 discs, the mixer undergoes dough strips where the discs are formed.
After
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this
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, following the forming phase, the
noodles
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 are cooked with oil and
then
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 dried.
Finally
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, the product is filled into cups and
then
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 seasoned with spices and added vegetables
subsequently
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, the cups are labelled and ready for sealing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words noodles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Manufacturing process
  • Noodle dough
  • Steaming
  • Cutting
  • Dough sheeting
  • Molding
  • Air-drying
  • Frying
  • Seasoning
  • Quality control
  • Packaging
  • Shelf life
  • Flavoring agents
  • Texture
  • Instant meal
  • Convenience food
  • Production line
  • Consumer
  • Ingredient mixing
  • Safety standards
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