The graph below presents the employment patterns in the USA between 1930 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph compares the American participation
on
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in
jobs
in Industrial,technical,sales, Use synonyms
agriculture
and other services fields within eight decades commencing from 1930.
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Overall
, Linking Words
while
the agricultural Linking Words
jobs
depicted a decreasing trend, all others showed the opposite of it over 80 years. Use synonyms
Although
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agriculture
was the highest demanded profession in 1930, it was the least by 2010. Use synonyms
Similarly
, industrial Linking Words
jobs
which appeared nearly 1945 Use synonyms
has
gained the highest demand within the USA Unnecessary verb
apply
at the end
.
When looking at the graph, agricultural activities like farming fishing and foresting reported Linking Words
its
' peak value in 1930 accounted Correct pronoun usage
their
80
, which is nearly eight times higher than all others. Change preposition
for 80
Then
, for the next 40 years Linking Words
agriculture
witnessed is steady decrease up to 60. Use synonyms
Thereafter
, Linking Words
the
Correct article usage
apply
agriculture
gradually decreased over a period of 40 decades and by the year 2010, it reported a minimum of nearly five.
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On the other hand
, technical, sales and other services reported Linking Words
a
equal quantity Change the article
an
on
1930. For the first three decades technical job availability remained still and raised slightly until 2010, reporting a total of nearly 50. Despite Change preposition
in
of
the apex showed in 1940, Change preposition
apply
jobs
related to other services reached a plateau status since 1960. Use synonyms
Similarly
, in the means of sales and office, after Linking Words
few
fluctuations during the first 40 Correct article usage
a few
years
it increased gradually and in the Add a comma
years,
last
decade it became stable Linking Words
in
20. Change preposition
at
Finally
, the number
of industrial Linking Words
jobs
were constant till 1960 after its occurrence in 1940. After Use synonyms
that
it showed a progressive elevation and Add a comma
that,
at the end
reported a peak of nearly 40.Linking Words
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Vocabulary: Replace the words jobs, agriculture with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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