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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012 You should write at least 150 words.

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012 You should write at least 150 words.
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The graph provides information about the number of
Australian
 exports for 4 main countries by percentage,namely Japan,
India
,
China
, and
US
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the US
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, between the
year
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years
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 1990 to 2012
Overall
, there
are
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is
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 an upward trend
on
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in
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India
 and
China
's
number
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numbers
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 throughout the period,
while
 the amount of
Japan
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Japan's
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 and
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the US's
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US's
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US
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 imports from
Australian
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Australia
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 show
an
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a
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 downward trend
at the end
 of
age
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the age
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. Regarding Japan, the
quantity
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number
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 of goods imported from Australia stood at 28% in 1990 and
sharly
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sharply
 declined in 1995, with
an
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a
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 gradual drop
unitil
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until
 the end
standing
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stood
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 at under one-fifth.
Similarly
,
Australian
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Australians
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 exported to
US
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the US
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 in 1990
as
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at
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 approximately 12% and
display
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displayed
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an
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a
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 flucuation until 2012,with over 6%.
In contrast
, the quantity of exports for
China
 and
India
 started at around 2% and 1% respectively in the beginning.
Then
, both slightly increased until 2000.
Moreover
,
the
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China
's figure dramatically rose in 2012,standing at 30%.
Additionally
,
the
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India
's import number from
Australian
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Australia
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 reached
the
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a
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 peak in 2010 and
then
 dropped again in 2012,with a few percentage
change
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changes
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australian, india, china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Percentage
  • Exports
  • Trend analysis
  • Upward/downward trend
  • Fluctuation
  • Comparison
  • Peak performance
  • Decline
  • Stability
  • Significant
  • Inferred
  • Global events
  • Economic context
  • Reflect
  • Influence
  • Patterns
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