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Your co-worker Irena Black wants to have a meeting with you on Tuesday afternoon. Write an email to Irena Black. In your email: Explain why you can’t meet her on Tuesday afternoon Offer to meet her on a different day Ask her what the meeting is about Try to write a minimum of 50 words

#co-worker #irena #tuesday #afternoon #email #can’t #offer
Dear Irena Black I received your invitation to join the meeting on Tuesday afternoon. But at that
time
, I have another important meeting with our project's clients. They will visit our office
whole
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the whole
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 of
Tusday
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Tuesday
. So can we arrange another slot for our meeting
.
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?
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 If the meeting is important and can not be late, I can offer you the
time
 of today, Monday afternoon. or you can choose the
time
 as
bellow
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below
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 10-12h Wednesday 14-16h
Thurday
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Thursday
 16-18h Friday. If you can't join
these
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at these
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time
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times
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, you can provide me
your
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with your
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scheduler
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schedule
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 (not Tuesday) I will find
the
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a
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time
 suitable with you. Ah, for good
preparerin
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preparation
 something before the meeting, would you mind
to share
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sharing
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 the
agendar
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agenda
 of
meeting
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the meeting
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 or what the
keypoint
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key point
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do
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apply
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you want to discuss in the meeting? Thanks and best regards. HienTT2
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task achievement
Make sure you carefully proofread your email for accuracy. There are some minor errors in your sentences which could somewhat obscure the clarity of your message.
coherence cohesion
Consider structuring your email with more distinct paragraphs for each key point. This will make it easier for the reader to follow your message.
coherence cohesion
Try to be a bit more concise in conveying your points to avoid redundancy.
task achievement
Your email could benefit from the use of more specific examples and clearer explanations. The time slots are well-presented, but the reason for requesting the meeting details could be more explicitly stated.
task achievement
You successfully covered all the points needed in the task: explaining why you couldn’t attend the original meeting, suggesting alternative times, and requesting more information about the meeting.
relevant specific examples
You have presented alternative times clearly, offering flexibility.

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