Writing task 1 (a letter) 150 words You are interested in attending a training course abroad but require financial support to do so. Write a letter to the education department requesting financial assistance. In your letter: - Introduce yourself - Describe the training course and how it would benefit your work - Explain why you need financial assistance.

Dear Joban, Hope you are doing well, I would like to introduce myself
first,
My name is Sandeep,
I
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am
final
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a final
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year student , from
mechanical
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department of your college.You will be glad to know that my application to attend the
harwards
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Harvard
mechanical training program has been selected.
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the same training that I missed
last
year
due to
sickness.
This
training will greatly benefit me for my future placement in
mechanical
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sector,
moreover
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certificate from
this
course will add up points in my
jobs
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interview.
However
, as already discussed with you earlier
last
month about my father's health conditions , I am not able to arrange enough money to buy my plane tickets . My father
is
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on sick leave
from
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last
month and
have
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no good source of income. Bringing
in to
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into
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your concern, about the importance of
this
training on my carrier, I request you help me with financial aid from the government funds of our education department. It would be really appreciated. Your
sincerly
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sincerely
, Deep Thank You
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coherence cohesion
Revise the greeting. Instead of 'Dear Joban,', 'Dear Sir/Madam' or the specific official's last name with a title (e.g., 'Dear Mr. Sharma,') might be more appropriate.
task achievement
Polish the introduction. Mention your full name and current status more clearly to create a stronger start.
coherence cohesion
Improve grammar and clarity. Use more formal language and correct grammatical mistakes.
task achievement
You have effectively outlined the purpose of your letter and explained your situation clearly.
coherence cohesion
The letter is well-organized with clear paragraphs for each point, making it easy to follow.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial assistance
  • professional development
  • enhance skills
  • tuition fees
  • travel expenses
  • accommodation
  • current role
  • directly related
  • performance at work
  • organization
  • burden
  • opportunity
  • institution
  • skills and knowledge
  • benefit
  • related costs
  • attendance
  • support
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