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The graph below shows the average trip length (in miles) among U.S. children aged 5 to 15 years old. Sunrise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons were relevant.

The graph below shows the average trip length (in miles) among U.S. children aged 5 to 15 years old. Sunrise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons were relevant.
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The graph illustrates the average trip length (in miles) among U.S. children aged in the period 5 to 15
years
 old. the information by selecting and reporting the five categories , and
make
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making
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 comparisons were relevant.
As
Correct word choice
Overall
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overall
 that the bus
marked
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mark
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 increased to 40 approximately in the period to 50
years
 ago . On
one
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the one
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 hand in the first ten
years
 the taxi enormous
increase
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increased
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 to to 10
percentage
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per cent
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while
 waking decreased
sharp
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sharply
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 to 10 in
first
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the first
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years
.
whereas
 there was
pluateua
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plateau
 the
trian
Correct your spelling
train
 for 50
years
.on the other
hands
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hand
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 there was
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a rose
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rose
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rise
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raiply
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in
the
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apply
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car
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cars
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approximately
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by approximately
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 30%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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