The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

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The given line graph illustrates how many distinct

activities

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were participated at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia over the period of 20 years between 2000 and 2020. Units are measured in number of participants.

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, it is evident that the two highest

activities

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remained steady with a small fluctuation throughout the given period,

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the other increased, with the exception of Amateur dramatics.

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, the Film club kept its position as the most popular activity over the years. In terms of the two

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with the highest level at the start, film club and martial arts activity stood at approximately 65 and 35 people, respectively.

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, the former hit a trough at just above 60 and the latter reached a peak at just below 40 in 2010. From

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point onwards, both fluctuated and went back to their original level in the final year. Regarding the remaining types of

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with lower levels, amateur dramatics and table tennis started at roughly 25 and 17 enthusiasts, correspondingly, which after both witnessed a slight growth to precisely 30 and 20 in 2005 before intersecting at exactly 20 in the next year. From 2010 to 2020, table tennis soared by about 30.

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, amateur dramatics had a significant decrease by around 25.

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, musical performances emerged in 2005 with 0 attendees and rose gradually until the end of the period.

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The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Many people think that painting and music do not directly improve the quality of people. Therefore, governments should not spend too much money on artistic projects. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that young people should go to university to further their education while others think they should be encouraged to work as car mechanics or builders etc.to serve society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

With the rise in popularity of the internet, newspapers will soon become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think foreign visitors should be charged more than local people when they visit the cultural and historical attractions in a country To what extent do you agree or disagree?