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The charts below show the proportion ofgraduates with different qualifications working in one engineering company in 1980 and 2008.

The charts below show the proportion ofgraduates with different qualifications working in one engineering company in 1980 and 2008.
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The pie charts illustrate the distribution of graduates with various qualifications employed in an engineering company in the years 1980 and 2008.
Overall
,
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 comparative charts highlight significant shifts in the educational backgrounds of the workforce over the 28-year period. In 1980, the largest part of
employees
 held
Master
's
degrees
 in
Science
,
comparising
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comprising
 29% of the workforce.
Similarly
,
employees
 with
Ph
.D.s in
Science
 represented a substantial portion,
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 for 25%.
On the contrary
, those with
Ph
.D.s in
Art
 constituted a mere 2%.
Employees
 with
Master
's
degrees
 in
Art
 formed 13% of the workforce,
while
 those with first
degrees
 in
Science
 and
Art
 made up 20% and 11%, respectively. By 2008, the company's employee qualifications had developed noticeably. The proportion of
employees
 with
Ph
.D.s in
Science
 had increased to 30%, maintaining its position as a significant part. There was
also
 a considerable rise in
employees
 with
Ph
.D.s in
Art
, reaching 7%. The percentage of
employees
 holding
Master
's
degrees
 in
Science
 remained unchanged at 29%,
while
 those with
Master
's
degrees
 in
Art
 increased to 17%.
However
, the proportion of
employees
 with first
degrees
 in
Science
 declined sharply to 12%, and people with first
degrees
 in
Art
 slightly decreased to 10%.
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