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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.
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The chart illustrates the changes in the number of goods transported by road, water, rail and pipeline within the United Kingdom from 1974 to 2002.
Overall
, it is readily apparent that there were increases, to some extent, in terms of the proportion of transported products in the four
type
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types
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 of
transportation
 channels, and the most popular type of
transportation
 mode was by land. As can be seen from the graph, road
transportation
 was the most utilised method of
transportation
 in the UK in 1975, with a total amount of approximately 70
million
tonnes
 of products being transported. Towards the end of the period,
this
 type of
transportation
 continued to rise and remained the most popular mode of
transportation
, accounting for almost 100
million
tonnes
 in 2002. The volume of products transported by ships and trains
were
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 almost
identify
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identical
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 in 1975
where
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when
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 it was around 40
million
tonnes
 each.
However
, the trend between the two had a
seperate
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separate
 path in 1978, when water
transportation
 gradually rose to about 45
million
tonnes
 in 1998 before having a surge to just over 60
millin
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million
tonnes
 in 2002.
In contrast
,
the
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rail
transportation
 started to fall in 1978, and
then
 underwent a
fluctuated
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 trend for the next decade, before
stabalising
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stabilising
stabilizing
 at 40
millions
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million
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tonnes
 towards the end of the period.
Last
, the lowest on the list was the pipeline
transportation
. There
was
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 only less than 5
million
tonnes
 of goods being transported via
this
 method in 1975. The number
then
 peaked in 1982 at just over 20
million
tonnes
 before a slight decrease to less than 20
million
tonnes
 in 1994. The figure
then
 remained the same for around years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words transportation, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Transported goods
  • Quantities
  • Trends
  • Modes of transport
  • Rail
  • Road
  • Water
  • Pipeline
  • Fluctuations
  • Predominance
  • Economic influences
  • Societal changes
  • Technological advancements
  • Environmental impact
  • Growth
  • Steady increase/decrease
  • Comparison
  • Period (e.g., decade, years)
  • Examination
  • Implications
  • Analysis
  • Conclusion
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