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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of
homes
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 that were either bought or rented in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011. Units are measured in percentages.
Overall
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, an increased majority was renting in the beginning before experiencing a downward trend
while
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 there was an upward trend in
people
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 buying houses. Despite
this
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, there was one period where the percentage of
people
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 that were renting and buying was the same. In 1918, there was a significant percentage of
people
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 renting
homes
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 which was well over 75% or three-quarters of households.
In
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contrast
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 the percentage of home ownership was significantly smaller at about 22%. Noticeably, the number of
people
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 paying rent declined dramatically to 40% in 1981 compared to 60% of individuals owning their
homes
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.
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, more
people
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 were owning their
homes
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 throughout the period.
Initially
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,
this
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 number stood at around 22% in 1918, before increasing to more than one-third in 1953 and eventually increasing to nearly 70% in 2001.
Moreover
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, in 1971,a similar number of households were renting and owning
homes
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words homes, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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