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The two below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day.

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The maps illustrate the developments in Lynwich
College
 from 2006 to the present day.
Overall
,
it is clear that
while
 some parts remained unchanged including the second
college
 building, sports field, cafeteria, bus stop and bike storage were added to the
map
. In the year 2006, there was a path in the centre of the
college
, which connected the
college
 buildings and the
library
. In the south, there was a garden.
Also
 to the North of the
map
, there was a more road. In the past of Car Park, there was a
library
.
Moreover
, in the north of the
map
, there were sports fields. Turning to the present day
map
, in the centre of the
college
 the cafeteria was built.
Also
, the
library
 has been replaced by a sports centre and the
library
 has been moved to the Southwest of the area.
Moreover
, bike storage was constructed near the car park.
Finally
, a new bus stop took place near the road which on the North of the
College
.
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introduction conclusion present
Improve the introduction and conclusion by providing a fuller overview and final thoughts.
clear comprehensive ideas
Enhance the explanations of changes more clearly and comprehensively to improve clarity.
relevant specific examples
Include more specific examples to support your descriptions and analyses of the developments.
logical structure
The essay provides a logical structure, clearly comparing the two maps.
complete response
The response successfully covers all the main points and changes in the maps.

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