The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
graph illustrates how many
shops
were opened and closed in a certain country from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the
number
of closing
shops
were
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was
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more fluctuated than opening
shops
.
Additionally
, between 2011 and 2011, the figure for opening
shops
had the most significant change. From 2011 to 2012,
although
around 8000
shops
were opened, they dramatically decreased to 4000
shops
.
However
, they increased after 2012. Between 2012
to
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and
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2013, the
number
of both opening and closing
shops
went up by approximately 1000 and 1100,
respectivelty
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respectively
.
Morevoer
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Moreover
, in 2014, closing
shop
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shops
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showed
considerably
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a considerably
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dropped
number
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numbers
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,
however
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however,
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they overtook after two years later. In constant, the
number
of opening
shops
remained unchanged with roughly 4000
number
of
shops
in the same time frame. Throughout the entire period, the figure for opening and closing
shops
decreased by nearly 5500 and 1300, respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words shops, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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