The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
graph illustrates how many shops
were opened and closed in a certain country from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
, it is clear that
the number
of closing shops
were
more fluctuated than opening Change the verb form
was
shops
. Additionally
, between 2011 and 2011, the figure for opening shops
had the most significant change.
From 2011 to 2012, although
around 8000 shops
were opened, they dramatically decreased to 4000 shops
. However
, they increased after 2012. Between 2012 to
2013, the Correct word choice
and
number
of both opening and closing shops
went up by approximately 1000 and 1100, respectivelty
.
Correct your spelling
respectively
Morevoer
, in 2014, closing Correct your spelling
Moreover
shop
showed Fix the agreement mistake
shops
considerably
dropped Correct article usage
a considerably
number
, Fix the agreement mistake
numbers
however
they overtook after two years later. In constant, the Add a comma
however,
number
of opening shops
remained unchanged with roughly 4000 number
of shops
in the same time frame. Throughout the entire period, the figure for opening and closing shops
decreased by nearly 5500 and 1300, respectively.Submitted by dksrlgus1017 on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words shops, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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