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Some people think that interview is an unreliable way for a company to recruit new staff, and there are better selection methods. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #interview #company #staff #selection #methods
The
interview
process
 is changed every day. A certain number of individual is concerned that
interview
 is not a reliable method for
recuriting
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recruiting
 new
employees
 from
the
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apply
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Companies, and there are superior methods to select
employees
 in organisations. I strongly agree with
this
 statement;
this
 essay will discuss it briefly. for the following reasons. To commence with,
Conventional
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the Conventional
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way
 of
selection
process
 is not reliable because
within
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, within
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 a short period of
time
, employers cannot decide a person's capacity.
That IS
, Some questions are asked by
the
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employers in the
interview
process
, but some questions are irrelevant to a particular position, even though they might be asked.
For example
, many Corporate Companies interviews are complex, and new
canditates
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candidates
 cannot get Jobs because
of
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they only expect answers from new Persons
instead
 of
give
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giving
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time
 to explore their Skills
coupled with
 ability.
Hence
, traditional
way
 of interviews
are
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is
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 not reliable.
Furthermore
, there are
other
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another selection process
other selection processes
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selection
process
will
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that will
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be helped to
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help
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 the new
employees
 get a chance to prove themselves,
such
 as
internship
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an internship
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 Program!
This
 is, employers will
be selected
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select
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 new
employees
 which how they perform in their intern period
while
 they have
mor
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more
time
, and
chance
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a chance
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 to show their ability and talent.
For instance
, during internships owners have to analyse new staff's communication skills, conflict management, group discussion and Professional performance;
this
 is the best
way
 to hire new
person
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people
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 as
employees
 rather than
interview
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the interview
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Process
. In Conclusion,
normal
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the normal
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process
 of
interview
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interviews
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 is
unreliably
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unreliable
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 because within
short
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a short
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 period of
time
 how
to
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apply
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managers select their new
staffs
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staff
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, so
new
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a new
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 superior method of
selection
Process
 is required which is
internship
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an internship
the internship
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,
this
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which
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 brings more benefits to new
staffs
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staff
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 that show. their skills and talents.
Therefore
, I strongly agree
with
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apply
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that
internship
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the internship
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way
 of the
selection
process
 is most suitable.
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task response
It is important to proofread your essay to correct grammatical errors and improve clarity. For example, phrases like 'a certain number of individual' should be 'a certain number of individuals' and 'because of they only expect answers from new Persons' should be 'because they only expect answers from new candidates'.
task response
The essay should have a clear and concise thesis statement that directly answers the question asked. Your thesis statement, 'I strongly agree with this statement; this essay will discuss it briefly,' can be more precise. Consider something like, 'I strongly agree that interviews are not a reliable method for recruitment and that internships can be a better alternative.'
task response
Develop your ideas thoroughly; some parts need more specific examples and explanations to support your points. For example, you mention that some interview questions are irrelevant but do not provide concrete examples of such questions.
coherence cohesion
You have included a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps in providing a structure to your essay.
task achievement
Your essay addresses the prompt by discussing the reliability of interviews and alternative methods of selection, fulfilling the task requirements.
coherence cohesion
The use of phrases like 'to commence with' and 'furthermore' helps in transitioning between ideas, making your essay easier to follow.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • assessment methods
  • comprehensive evaluation
  • objective selection process
  • standardized testing
  • AI-based selection tools
  • biased
  • practical assessments
  • work trials
  • group activities
  • task-based tests
  • project submissions
  • time-consuming
  • resource-intensive
  • virtual simulations
  • assessment centers
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