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The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The diagrams illustrate the life cycle of a species of big fish called the
salmon
.
Overall
 it is evident that
this
 fish
go
Correct subject-verb agreement
goes
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thought
Correct your spelling
through
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stage
Correct article usage
a stage
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to
Change preposition
of
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 growth starting with swamps and ending in
ocean
Correct article usage
the ocean
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.
Firstly
this
 tainy
salmon
 first
growth
Replace the word
grew
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 in the swamps and
eat
Wrong verb form
ate
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 the small plan
then
want
Wrong verb form
wanted
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 to see
and
Correct your spelling
an
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 increase
size
Change preposition
in size
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 on the other
hands
Fix the agreement mistake
hand
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 it was increased marked numbers of
salmon
whereas
 someone go to
ocean
Add an article
the ocean
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 and
other
Fix the agreement mistake
others
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 go
to
Replace the word
too
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 far
way
Correct your spelling
away
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.
While
 other
of
Change preposition
apply
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salmon
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salmon with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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