The diagram below shows how a biofuel called ethanol is produced. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram shows the production of a certain type of biofuel named ethanol.
Overall
, it can be inferred that the process consists of eight different stages, starting from planting trees
and ending with an
ethanol which is ready to be used as fuel.
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Initially
, trees
, as the main ingredient of biofuels, are planted to grow until it is mature. Sunshine and carbon dioxide are used by the trees
as their main source of energy in order to grow. Once it is mature, farmers crop the trees
during harvesting time. The cropped trees
then
begin their pre-processing stage at the mill, where it is grounded in order to extract their cellulose. The cellulose then
being processed at the laboratory to be concentrated to
a sugar.
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into
Subsequently
, microbes are added into
the sugar and Change preposition
to
finally
it becomes Add a comma
finally,
an
ethanol, which is ready to be used as biofuels for vehicles, Remove the article
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such
as cars, lorries, and airplanes
. Those vehicles produce carbon dioxide which contaminates the air. The carbon dioxide is beneficial for Change the spelling
aeroplanes
trees
to be utilized as their source of energy, along with
the sunshine. The cycle, therefore
, commences again, as the trees
are going to be used as the raw materials of ethanols.Submitted by michellyonggo on
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