The diagram below shows how a biofuel called ethanol is produced. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram shows the production of a certain type of biofuel named ethanol.
Overall
, it can be inferred that the process consists of eight different stages, starting from planting Linking Words
trees
and ending with Use synonyms
an
ethanol which is ready to be used as fuel.
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Initially
, Linking Words
trees
, as the main ingredient of biofuels, are planted to grow until it is mature. Sunshine and carbon dioxide are used by the Use synonyms
trees
as their main source of energy in order to grow. Once it is mature, farmers crop the Use synonyms
trees
during harvesting time. The cropped Use synonyms
trees
Use synonyms
then
begin their pre-processing stage at the mill, where it is grounded in order to extract their cellulose. The cellulose Linking Words
then
being processed at the laboratory to be concentrated Linking Words
to
a sugar.
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into
Subsequently
, microbes are added Linking Words
into
the sugar and Change preposition
to
Linking Words
finally
it becomes Add a comma
finally,
an
ethanol, which is ready to be used as biofuels for vehicles, Remove the article
apply
such
as cars, lorries, and Linking Words
airplanes
. Those vehicles produce carbon dioxide which contaminates the air. The carbon dioxide is beneficial for Change the spelling
aeroplanes
trees
to be utilized as their source of energy, Use synonyms
along with
the sunshine. The cycle, Linking Words
therefore
, commences again, as the Linking Words
trees
are going to be used as the raw materials of ethanols.Use synonyms
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