The diagram below shows how a biofuel called ethanol is produced. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how a biofuel called ethanol is produced. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram shows the production of a certain type of biofuel named ethanol.
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, it can be inferred that the process consists of eight different stages, starting from planting
trees
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and ending with
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ethanol which is ready to be used as fuel.
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,
trees
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, as the main ingredient of biofuels, are planted to grow until it is mature. Sunshine and carbon dioxide are used by the
trees
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as their main source of energy in order to grow. Once it is mature, farmers crop the
trees
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during harvesting time. The cropped
trees
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begin their pre-processing stage at the mill, where it is grounded in order to extract their cellulose. The cellulose
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being processed at the laboratory to be concentrated
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a sugar.
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, microbes are added
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the sugar and
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finally
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it becomes
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ethanol, which is ready to be used as biofuels for vehicles,
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as cars, lorries, and
airplanes
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aeroplanes
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. Those vehicles produce carbon dioxide which contaminates the air. The carbon dioxide is beneficial for
trees
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to be utilized as their source of energy,
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the sunshine. The cycle,
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, commences again, as the
trees
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are going to be used as the raw materials of ethanols.
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