The municipal corporation in the area where you live has decided to demolish a historical building to build a shopping center. Write a letter to the mayor of the corporation. In your letter: You have to explain why it is important to preserve the building suggest how the building can be used to benefit the local community.

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Dear mayor

This

is a letter from your citizen who

have

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lived in

this

city

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than 80 years and beg you not to

desmolish

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demolish

the building and build a new one.I

bornd

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born

bound

and grew up here,before I die, I hope

this

city

could

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keep their history

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longer. The building which decided to

destroyed

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and the

placed

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would build a new shopping

center

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centre

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is a

sadly

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decision. The building was established more than 300 years

and

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even

host

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the Queen before. I believe

this

historical place could be restored and cooperate with the newest shopping

center

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to show

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elegant and stylish building

allow

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this

old house reborn again. Hope to receive a reply letter Yours faithful Diana LIN

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coherence

Ensure that every paragraph contains a single main idea and is clearly structured. For instance, the introduction, historical significance, and suggestions for the future could have been divided into separate paragraphs.

task response

The letter does cover the necessary points, but some ideas could be elaborated more. For instance, explain more detailed benefits of preserving the building for the community.

task response

The tone of the letter is suitable for addressing a mayor. It is respectful and earnest, which is appropriate for the purpose.

coherence and cohesion

The greeting and closing of the letter are appropriate, but remember to double-check formal closings for slight errors in phrasing. ('Yours faithfully' instead of 'Yours faithful')

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

120 words

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