The municipal corporation in the area where you live has decided to demolish a historical building to build a shopping center. Write a letter to the mayor of the corporation. In your letter: You have to explain why it is important to preserve the building suggest how the building can be used to benefit the local community.
Dear mayor
This
is a letter from your citizen who have
lived in Change the verb form
has
this
city more
than 80 years and beg you not to Change preposition
for more
desmolish
the building and build a new one.I Correct your spelling
demolish
bornd
and grew up here,before I die, I hope Correct your spelling
born
bound
this
city could
keep their history Wrong verb form
can
more
longer.
The building which decided to Change the word
apply
destroyed
and the Add a missing verb
be destroyed
placed
would build a new shopping Replace the word
place
center
is a Change the spelling
centre
sadly
decision. The building was established more than 300 years Change the adverb
sad
and
even Rephrase
ago and
host
the Queen before.
I believe Wrong verb form
hosted
this
historical place could be restored and cooperate with the newest shopping center
to show Change the spelling
centre
a
elegant and stylish building Change the article
an
allow
Fix the infinitive
to allow
this
old house reborn again.
Hope to receive a reply letter
Yours faithful
Diana LINSubmitted by diana1992lin on
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coherence
Ensure that every paragraph contains a single main idea and is clearly structured. For instance, the introduction, historical significance, and suggestions for the future could have been divided into separate paragraphs.
task response
The letter does cover the necessary points, but some ideas could be elaborated more. For instance, explain more detailed benefits of preserving the building for the community.
task response
The tone of the letter is suitable for addressing a mayor. It is respectful and earnest, which is appropriate for the purpose.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are appropriate, but remember to double-check formal closings for slight errors in phrasing. ('Yours faithfully' instead of 'Yours faithful')
The Closing
The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.
Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.
Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)
- Yours faithfully,
Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)
- Yours sincerely,
Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)
- Best regards,
- Warm wishes,