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The charts below shows the percentage of two genres of TV programmes watched by male and female in Australia.

The charts below shows the percentage of two genres of TV programmes watched by male and female in Australia.
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The charts below
shows
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show
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 the percentage of two genres of TV programmes watched by
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 in Australia. We can see in
this
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 chart’s information four different age groups between 16 and 45+. From 35 to 45
people
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 prefer to watch
reality
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 shows, and from 16 to 34 fewer
people
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 watch
reality
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 shows.
People
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 between 16-24 and 45+ watch
game
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 shows. Between 45 and 44
people
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 are less interested in
game
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 shows. The difference
of
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two
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the two
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graph
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that
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 the female was chosen
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reality
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for reality
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 shows, men
was
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 chosen
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game
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for game
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 shows. As
it
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presented in the chart percentage of
reality
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 shows the highest
was
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were
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 chosen by
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the female
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female
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females
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. The lowest was chosen by
male
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the male
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. And in
percentage
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the percentage
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 of
watch
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watched
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game
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 shows the highest was chosen by men. The lowest was chosen by women.
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 the chart, more women than men selected
reality
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 shows.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, reality, game with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 10 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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