The charts below shows the percentage of two genres of TV programmes watched by male and female in Australia.

The charts below shows the percentage of two genres of TV programmes watched by male and female in Australia.
The charts below
shows
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the percentage of two genres of TV programmes watched by
male
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males
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and
female
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females
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in Australia. We can see in
this
chart’s information four different age groups between 16 and 45+. From 35 to 45
people
prefer to watch
reality
shows, and from 16 to 34 fewer
people
watch
reality
shows.
People
between 16-24 and 45+ watch
game
shows. Between 45 and 44
people
are less interested in
game
shows. The difference
of
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two
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the two
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graph
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that
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the female was chosen
reality
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shows, men
was
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chosen
game
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shows. As
it
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presented in the chart percentage of
reality
shows the highest
was
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chosen by
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the female
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female
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females
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. The lowest was chosen by
male
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the male
a male
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. And in
percentage
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the percentage
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of
watch
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watched
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game
shows the highest was chosen by men. The lowest was chosen by women.
According to
the chart, more women than men selected
reality
shows.
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