The charts below shows the percentage of two genres of TV programmes watched by male and female in Australia.

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shows

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the percentage of two genres of TV programmes watched by

male

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males

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and

female

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females

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in Australia. We can see in

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chart’s information four different age groups between 16 and 45+. From 35 to 45

people

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prefer to watch

reality

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shows, and from 16 to 34 fewer

people

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watch

reality

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shows.

People

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between 16-24 and 45+ watch

game

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shows. Between 45 and 44

people

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are less interested in

game

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shows. The difference

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two

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graph

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that

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the female was chosen

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reality

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for reality

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shows, men

was

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chosen

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game

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for game

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shows. As

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presented in the chart percentage of

reality

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shows the highest

was

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chosen by

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the female

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female

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females

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. The lowest was chosen by

male

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the male

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. And in

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the percentage

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watch

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watched

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game

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shows the highest was chosen by men. The lowest was chosen by women.

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the chart, more women than men selected

reality

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shows.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

142 words

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The charts below shows the percentage of two genres of TV programmes watched by male and female in Australia.

Some celebrities say their love lives shouldn’t be under scrutiny in the media. However, other people feel that they should accept this as part of their fame. Discuss both perspectives and give your opinion?

Some hold the view that ideas and information should be completely open-there should be no controls on what people can read and watch in the media (TV, newspapers, Internet). Do you agree with this view, or do you think that in some circumstances governments should limit the freedom of the media?

Millions of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living sstandards on Earth. Do you argee or disagree?

Some people think that children should only read academic books. Others believe that reading books for pleasure is equally important. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.