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Th e maps below show an industriaal area in the ttown of Norbinton, planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

Th e maps below show an industriaal area in the ttown of Norbinton, planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The map illustrates the
blue print
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blueprint
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 of current and future
planned
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plans
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 in Norbiton town
at
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in
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industrial
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the industrial
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 area. As we can see, there will be lots of changes on the second map
whereas
 new
infrastruture
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infrastructure
 will be added in the future.
Firstly
,
on
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the first
of
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the
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apply
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picture
shown
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shows
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 that only factories had been built around the roundabout but in the time to come there will be replaced by new housing and other
contructions
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constructions
construction
. On the
sourth
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south
fourth
 side of the road, a small roundabout will be created to ease the traffic congestion in the town. Meanwhile, in between
of
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both roundabouts , shops and medical
centre
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centres
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 will soon
to
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be construct
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be constructed
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 to increase
standard
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the standard
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 of living
of
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in
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 the communities.
Not to mention
,
largest
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 playground and school
also
 will be added on the east side of the second map.
Last
 but not least,
new
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the new
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 bridge will be built across the river to access
to
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future housing.
Overall
, Many buildings will be established
on
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in
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 Norbiton town as the population
are
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is
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 rising and
with
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apply
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the new facilities will
sure
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 improve one's quality of life.
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