The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart gives information about Australians who
excercised
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exercised
on a regular basis by gender in 2010.
Overall
, in most of the
age
groups,
women
did more regular physical activity than
men
, except for the youngest and oldest groups. Among
Australian
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aged from 25 to 64, the percentages of
female
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females
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doing physical activity regularly were higher than those of
male
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males
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and the highest figure went to
female
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females
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of
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in
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the 45
yo
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to
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54
age
group
, with 53.3 %. The only
group
that the percentage of
men
was higher than
women
was the youngest
age
group
, from 15 to 24 years old, at 52.8 %.
This
figure was
also
the highest percentage of
male
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males
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doing regular physical activity compared to those of other
age
groups. In terms of differences between the percentages of
men
and
women
excercisng
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exercising
exercised
regularly, the 35 to 44
age
group
saw the largest difference with 52.5%
women
compared to just 39.5%
men
. There was almost no difference between the two genders in the
age
group
from
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65 years and older, with 46.7%
men
and 47.1%
women
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Australian men
  • Australian women
  • Age groups
  • Regular physical activity
  • Participated
  • Increased
  • Decreased
  • Proportion
  • Physically active
  • Gender difference
  • Engaged
  • Exercise
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