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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995 – 2002.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995 – 2002.
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The diagram illustrates the amount of time spent by UK citizens,
according to
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 three different types of phone
call
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 between 1995 and 2002.
It is clear that
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 calls made via local, fixed lines were the highest rate compared to others.
However
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, there was an upward trend in using national/ international landlines and mobiles. A glance at the graph reveals that the
billion
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minutes
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 of fixed-line were over 70
billion
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 for the local, and about half of that amount of time for national/ international calls
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 the figure was approximately 4
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 for user mobiles in 1995. Over the following four years, the figure
of
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for
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 all
kind
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 of phone calls increased steadily. By 1999, the number of
minutes
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 of using landlines hit the highest point
to
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of
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 90
billion
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.
Subsequently
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, the data for
this
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 category fell until the end of the period.
By contrast
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, the other two types of phone
call
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calls
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 continued to rise. The
minutes
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 of national/ international landline calls passed 60
billion
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, and
also
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 using cell phones went up dramatically to around 45
billion
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minutes
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion, minutes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number
  • minutes
  • telephone calls
  • UK
  • divided into
  • categories
  • from
  • to
  • overall
  • increased significantly
  • local fixed-line calls
  • accounted for
  • largest proportion
  • throughout
  • period
  • international calls
  • highest rate of growth
  • experiencing
  • sharp increase
  • national long-distance calls
  • remained relatively stable
  • slight decline
  • towards
  • end
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