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The diagram shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station

The diagram shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station
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The process of manufacturing electricity in a hydroelectric
power
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station
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 is demonstrated in the diagram.
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, the man-made procedure consists of
the
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 low
level-reservoir
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reservoir
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,
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power
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a power
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station
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 with
generator
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a generator
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, pipelines, and
high-level
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a high-level
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 reservoir, including different stages, namely, the flow of
water
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, its generation, and the
water
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 pumping. The cyclical method begins with the
water
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, going from the low-level reservoir to reversible turbines where it is pumped into the high-level reservoir
in
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the
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night. afterwards, the liquid flows up into the
water
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 storage created by
river
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the river
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.
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, the intake is
opened
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at
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 the day. Once the day starts, the
water
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 is sent to the rotating mechanisms where it passes through the
power
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station
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, flowing up to
generator
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a generator
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.
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, the
water
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 goes to
power
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 lines, followed by going to the national grid.
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, the electricity generation in the hydroelectric
power
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station
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 is a complex process, which includes a lot of different stages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Reservoir
  • Penstock
  • Turbine
  • Generator
  • Transformer
  • High voltage
  • Renewable energy
  • Kinetic energy
  • Potential energy
  • Power grid
  • Sustainable
  • Flow rate
  • Energy conversion
  • Hydraulic pressure
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