Many people say that the only way to guarantee getting a good job is to complete a university education. Others claim that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the world of work? discuss your opinion.
There are two groups of
people
who have some beliefs about how people
have a nice job
. The first group believes that there is a need to graduate completely from university
while
others think people
should have experience
and work
after school
courses. I believe having experience
is more helpful for finding the best job
but in a situation that is
not after school
.
Educating in university
and having a certificate
can increase the chance of taking a job
. It means when someone has a certificate
have the confidence to apply for a lot of jobs that are related to their major in university
also
some companies have this
condition to employers that they have to get a certificate
from the university
that they spent their education course on it. For example
, when somebody wants a job
and applies for the company which the person is going to work
ask how you know and where you learnt this
job
so if this
one does not have a certificate
, anybody would not believe that and also
this
person is going to have less priority for taking the job
. so educating completely can be useful in these types of conditions.
Working after school
to be able to know the world of work
and have experiences has some benefits and disadvantages. In other words
, working after school
for young people
is a bit harmful because they are in these years they need to travel and experience
something funny with their friends. On the other hand
, starting work
very soon can give them this
opportunity to be more dominant when they become an adult. However
, they may lose the golden years of their youngness. So working after school
has some problems which will appear after years.
In my point of view having experience
in work
can be started with a college course or voluntary work
after high school
. After high school
students grow as much as can make decisions for their future without any hesitation and they are not too young to work
. For example
, a student after spending high school
knows the thing as well that needs. So it can be so much better result for achieving their goals in future.
In conclusion, to find the best job
it is better for people
to have experience
but at the right time. As far as I am not a profession
in Replace the word
professional
this
area is better that these persons take
the best decision.Correct your spelling
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