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For centuries, important parts of education have remained such as reading, writing and math. With the advent of computers, some people think that computer skill be made as a fourth skill to be added to the list. To what extend do you agree?

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As far as for many years reading, writing and math have been the main educational topics after the appearance of
computers
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 some
people
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 believe that computer
skills
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 are as important as others are and have to be the next topic after these three topics. I strongly agree with
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 opinion because of two clear reasons which are
first,
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using
computers
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 in every company for a variety of
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.
secondly
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, some new jobs are done only by
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 which is a lot.
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,using
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 in each company is one the most important reasons
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 learning related
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.It means
todays
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today
 all
of
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countries
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 are doing all of their
work
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 by
computers
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 and everything is saved in these objects even some
apoitnmet
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appointment
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computers
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 around the world.
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, in the past
people
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 at
work
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 used to post letters
for
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to
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 other companies or organizations but nowadays everything has changed and companies are doing
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work
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 by sending
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also
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 some
meeting
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meetings
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 are held Online by applications namely, Skype or Google
meet
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 that made
works
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 easier.
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, it is essential for every single person to learn using
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computers
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skills
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.
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, there are
alot
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a lot
 of new jobs that are only done by using
computers
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. After Covid-19 many works
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 because of the needs that were new and
people
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 had to do most of the things online or using
computers
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.
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, working distance and even doctors visited ills online a lot of courses were online and
people
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force
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 to
laern
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learn
 working by
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 and
also
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 the understood that having
computers
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skills
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 can help them to earn money when every
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are
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our
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 holiday. So a lot of
aportunity
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opportunity
 comes towards
pesons
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persons
 who know about
computers
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. In conclusion,
computers
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 are so important in the modern world and
there
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they
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 are like a common language around the world and it is necessary for everyone to learn these
skills
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writing
While your essay offers a strong opinion and addresses it with multiple supporting points, there are several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that affect clarity. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, and sentence structure to improve readability.
task response
Make sure to fully develop each point with clear and relevant examples. For instance, explain 'new jobs that are only done by using computers' with specific examples or statistics to make your argument more compelling.
coherence cohesion
Use transition words more effectively to improve the flow of your essay. Phrases like 'In addition,' 'Moreover,' and 'Furthermore' can help to connect ideas smoothly.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which makes it easy to follow your argument.
task response
You provide several relevant examples that support your main points, such as the use of emails and online meetings, which demonstrate the practical application of computer skills in modern workplaces.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital literacy
  • Information technology
  • Essential skills
  • Integration
  • Technological prowess
  • Curriculum
  • Global competitiveness
  • 21st-century skills
  • Pedagogy
  • Access to information
  • Innovation
  • Digital divide
  • Educational equity
  • Online learning platforms
  • Digital native
  • Coding and programming
  • Computer proficiency
  • Technological fluency
  • E-learning
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