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some people prefer to work on school project with a group while others would rather work alone. Discuss both sides and give you opinion

#people #work #school #project #group
Just reading facts and learning from them from
others
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perspective
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 does not
siffice
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suffice
 the need to complete the education, to improve
this
project
work
 are necessity some believe that
work
 alone is far better than working as a
group
.
This
 essay will
disscuss
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discuss
 both
aspect
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to complete
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of completing
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 a
task
 from a
student
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student's
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 perspective using reasoned examples and
conclusion
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 ending with a personal opinion.
To begin
 with,
project
work
are
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 beneficial because it allows
students
 to
work
 more efficiently and
working
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work
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stressfree
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while
 completing big projects.
Firstly
, working on
big
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project
 can be divided
in to
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 segments to complete the
project
 within the time constraints.
Additionally
, working in
group
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a group
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allow
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allows
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students
 to learn about the importance of leadership and teamwork.
Secondly
, working in a
group
further
 provides
opportunity
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an opportunity
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 to reach for help, if
students
gets
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 stuck.
This
prevent
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prevents
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students
to get
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from getting
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 into depression, anxiety and
condition
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conditions
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 like panic
attack
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.
On the other hand
, working alone is proven
efficiently
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 through many surveys, it is believed
this
 way they can understand the sense of responsibility. Primarily, the individual does not have to rely on anyone to complete the
task
in
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at
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 hand,
where
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 in a
group
 the
task's
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tasks
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 get vulnerable if someone in the
group
 does not complete the
task
 properly.
Secondly
, it gives
opportunity
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an opportunity
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 for
students
 to handle pressure In conclusion and in terms of personal opinion a balanced approach is necessary.
Students
 needs to learn both aspects to prepare
students
 for adult life. Where
learning
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leadership skills and teamwork can be learned from working in a
group
support
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to support
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 them in corporate, working alone allows
students
 to learn to handle pressure and not
relying
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rely
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 on anyone to complete the
task
in
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at
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 hand.
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complete response
You touched on several key points about the benefits of both individual and group work, showing a good understanding of the topic.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaboration
  • diverse ideas
  • comprehensive outcome
  • distribute tasks
  • individual strengths
  • efficient
  • interpersonal skills
  • communication
  • conflict resolution
  • teamwork
  • unequal participation
  • contribute
  • conflicts
  • complete control
  • quality of work
  • consistent
  • personal standards
  • self-discipline
  • time management
  • responsible
  • productive
  • focused
  • distractions
  • dynamics
  • diverse perspectives
  • collaborative synergy
  • innovative solutions
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