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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. TEST 1

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. TEST 1
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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of Australian
people
 who buy
coffee
 and tea
along with
 the proportion of how many individuals visit a
cafe
 during the
last
 four weeks in five cities.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 most
people
 in Australia prefer to go to a
cafe
,
expect
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except
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 for the citizens in Adelaide.
According to
 the data, most of the
populations
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population
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 in Sydney enjoy going to their nearby
cafe
, with slightly above 60% of them
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 for
this
 kind of
activities
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activity
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,
whereas
 the rates of those who prefer buying
instant
coffee
 and fresh
coffee
 fall at around 45% each.
Furthermore
, the percentage of
people
 living in Melbourne and Hobart show a similar pattern, with around 62% of the
people
 there
are
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likely to visit a
cafe
, making it the number one choice of them
as well as
 in Sydney, rather than buying fresh and
instant
coffee
 in the grocery stores. In Melbourne,
moreover
, there are nearly 50% of the
people
 choose to buy
instant
coffee
, but those who buy fresh
coffee
 are registered at just above 40% during the period. Meanwhile, in Hobart, there are around 55% of the citizens
buying
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buy
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the
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instant
 beans and below 40% choose to buy
the
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fresh
one
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ones
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.
On the other hand
, the trend of
people
 in Brisbane indicates that individuals who prefer to go to a
coffee
 shop and buy
instant
coffee
 are nearly similar,
although
 the number of
cafe
 visitors is higher, respectively at around 55% and approximately 54% of them.
However
, those who want to buy
the
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fresh beans are only registered at below 40% of them.
In contrast
,
people
 living in Adelaide show a unique pattern compared to the remaining cities, as 50% of the
people
 there prefer to buy the
instant
 one, making it the most
favored
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 choice in terms of enjoying
coffee
,
while
 those who want to go to a local
cafe
 and those who buy fresh
coffee
 are below 40% of them.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, coffee, cafe, instant with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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