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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
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The line graph provides information about the average
carbon
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dioxide
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 discharged
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 1 person across 4 different countries (The UK, Sweden, Italy and Portugal) from 1967 to 2007. In general, the research in Italy and Portugal experienced an upward trend over the
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 there was a significant decline in The UK, and
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 to
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, Sweden
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 reduced over the examined
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. Starting at 11
tonnes
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 in 1967, CO2 (
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dioxide
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) emissions in the UK dropped over the next 40 years. Despite declining back down to approximately 9
tonnes
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 in 2007, the UK’s
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dioxide
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 discharged was by far the highest.
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, regarding the number of Sweden’s
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 emissions after a significant increase from roughly 9
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 in 1967 to around 11
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 in 1977, the figure
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 suddenly decreased to 7
tonnes
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 in 1987, followed by a 20-year
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 of stability and stood at nearly 6
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 year. Meanwhile, the object
that
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experienced an
overall
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 increase in Italy’s emissions, from approximately 4
tonnes
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 in 1967 to around 8
tonnes
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 in 2007, respectively. During the same
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, the average
carbon
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dioxide
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 discharged in Portugal
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 was the lowest of all categories, beginning at 1 ton in 1967 and steadily rising to over 5
tonnes
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 by 2007.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, dioxide, period, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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