You are advised to spend about 20 minutes on this task. The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You are advised to spend about  20 minutes on this task.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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us the
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energy
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greenhouse
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was caused by heating and cooling meanwhile the
household
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caused by heating and cooling is 10% lower.
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water heating is the second
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greenhouse
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water heating is 23%. now oppositely the
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of the refrigeration
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household
energy
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gas
in
Australia
. the lighting
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household
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Australia
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Australia
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of other appliances in
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greenhouse
gas
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of 8%. the
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greenhouse
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, household, energy, gas, australia, greenhouse, problems, difference with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • average household
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • energy use
  • percentage
  • chart
  • category
  • compare
  • disparity
  • proportion
  • corresponding
  • relative to
  • contribution
  • structured comparison
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