You are advised to spend about 20 minutes on this task. The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You are advised to spend about  20 minutes on this task.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Australian households consume a significant amount of
energy
for heating and cooling, followed closely by water heating 23%. Interestingly,
while
appliances consume less
energy
overall
12% for refrigeration and 24% for other appliances, they are responsible for a larger portion of greenhouse gas emissions 16% and 25% respectively.
This
suggests that appliances,
while
not major
energy
users
,
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are less
energy
efficient than other household functions. It's
also
worth noting that lighting 11%
energy
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use contributes a relatively small proportion of greenhouse gases 7% compared to water heating 23%
energy
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use and 25%
emissions
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.
This
indicates that lighting is likely dominated by
energy
-efficient technologies like LED bulbs
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  • average household
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • energy use
  • percentage
  • chart
  • category
  • compare
  • disparity
  • proportion
  • corresponding
  • relative to
  • contribution
  • structured comparison
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