You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Group or team activities can teach more important skills for life than those activities which are done alone. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

It is believed that cohort
activities
provide more relevant growth abilities than individual ones. Personally, I agree with the view owing to the fact that these tasks teach the cooperation techniques applied in real life.
Although
it has its disadvantages.
This
essay will shed light on both sides of the view and provide evidence to prove the arguments. On the one hand, group task boosts individual cooperation capabilities.
In other words
, these
activities
enhance a wide variety of techniques
such
as :
to be
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a good team player and communicating efficiently with others. Let us take football sport as an example, better coordination and understanding are needed to be
well-succeed
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successful
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, the same skills, which are
must
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a must
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in real soul.
As a result
, individual or collective goal is met, communities get connected and social issues are tackled.
Moreover
,
this
is the overriding reason for successful professionals worldwide.
In addition
to
this
, when an individual involves himself
into
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in
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an
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a
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groups
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group
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activity, he stops thinking about his personal goals.
As a result
, he becomes selfless and starts to think for his group.
For instance
,
A
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An
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article published by The Hindu, in 2020, stated that when a player
involved
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is involved
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in games like
circket
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cricket
circuit
, the players usually never think of their personal records, but
instead
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instead,
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they try to play and make their team win.
Hence
,
selfless
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a selfless
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attitude is
also
on
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one
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of the most important
part
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parts
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thats
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that's
that
built
in
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into
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these kind
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this kind
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of events. In conclusion,
although
activities
done
in
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apply
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alone have
its
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their
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own benefits,
but
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apply
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it's
out weighed
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outweighed
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by the advantages that group
activities
get with them
such
as
selflessnes
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selflessness
selfless
nature and
leadersip
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leadership
skill
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skills
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.
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