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The graph shows the percentage of UK adolescents following a vegetarian diet. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the percentage of UK adolescents following a vegetarian diet. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided chart illustrates the number of UK adolescents following a vegetarian diet in a duration starting from 1960 and
continuting
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continuing
 to 2020 .
Overall
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 ,
it is clear that
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 the highest amount of UK citizens that followed a vegan diet
is
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was
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 in the years 1960 to 1980 but it gradually increased in the latter
year
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 .
Also
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 , after these years the numbers have not had a dramatic rise just a change of numbers here and there .
However
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 , in the
year
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2000
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2000,
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 the number of adolescents went down clearly with only about 5% of them following the diet .
It is clear that
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, after the huge slump in the
year
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 2000 the percentage of people climbed
slowlly
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slowly
 but not hugely as it grew to 10 % by the
year
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 2020 .

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "it is clear that".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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