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The chart illustrates consumption of three kinds of fast food by teenagers in Mauritius from 1985 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart illustrates consumption of three kinds of fast food by teenagers in Mauritius from 1985 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph shows the consumption of three types of fast food
such
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 as
hamburgers
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, pizza, and fried
chicken
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 by teenagers from Mauritius from 1985 to 2015.
Overall
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,
hamburgers
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 and fried
chicken
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 have risen significantly over the
last
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 30
years
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.
On the other hand
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, the number of pizzas has dropped abruptly in the same
years
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. In 1985,
hamburgers
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 and fried
chicken
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 stood at 10 and 5 numbers of
times
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 eaten per
year
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 by teenagers, in the following
years
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 both foods were increasing gradually. By 2000,
hamburgers
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 and fried
chicken
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 accounted for 40
times
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 eaten per
year
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 respectively. In 2005, fried
chicken
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 was 60
times
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 per
year
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, it stopped reaching a plateau in 2010, and in the next 5
years
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, it had a small increase.
On the other hand
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, pizza in 1985 was the fastest food eaten by young people accounting for 60
times
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 eaten. But in the following
years
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, the number of pizzas consumed declined precipitously. In 2015, only 10
times
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 eaten per
year
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was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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 selected for teenagers.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hamburgers, chicken, years, times, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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