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There have been some problems with the bus service, especially its reliability, in your area over the last two weeks.

#bus #service #reliability #area #two #weeks
Dear Sir/Madam, Every day I stay on the bus
staion
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station
 and
wait
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wait for
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 transport
nubmer
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number
 eight. But
last
 two
week
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weeks
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 I have
problems
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had problems
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 with your transport because
its
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it's
it is
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 coming too late and I
pass
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passed
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 my first lesson
in
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at
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 the university. When I
ask
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asked
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 about
this
porblem
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problem
driver
, he
sad
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said
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me
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to me
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 that his partner was going
to
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on
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 vacation,
that is
 why
driver
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the driver
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 working
wighout
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on
 weekends. I have only one bus on my street and I need
in
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apply
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it. I would like to that you
find
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to find
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second
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a second
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driver
 and I think
this
 variant can help you to solve
problem
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the problem
a problem
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 with my situation.
I
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I am
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afraid that your main
driver
 is hardworking and can
will
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apply
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scik
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sick
. I hope you are looking
my
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at my
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 letter and give me
answer
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the answer
an answer
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 to my letter. Best regards,
Vladmir
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Vladimir
 Belitskii
Submitted by samedovateacher on

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task achievement
Work on the clarity and accuracy of your sentences. Some phrases are difficult to understand due to grammatical errors.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to organize your essay with clear paragraphs. This will help in logically structuring your ideas.
coherence cohesion
Conclude your letter with a clear, summarizing statement or call to action. This gives a strong end to your response.
task achievement
You made a clear attempt to explain the reason behind the bus delay by mentioning the driver's partner went on vacation.
task achievement
The letter addresses the issues within the bus service and clearly states personal inconveniences due to it.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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