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Some people prefer to eat at food stands 9 or restaurants. Other people prefer to band prepare and eat food at home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Over the
last
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 few decades,
wether
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whether
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 eating out or consuming at
home
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have
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has
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 become one of the most questioned
issue
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issues
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.
While
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,
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apply
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 some groups of
people
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 support the viewpoint of going out and
eat
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eating
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 yummy foods, others oppose eating out and advocate consuming
food
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 at
home
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. In
this
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essay
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essay,
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i
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I
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 will debate both sides and give my personal hypothesis to it.
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 with, it is commonly
commonly
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argued by some individuals about
the
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apply
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consumption outside. The first uphold that they bring to support their idea is no need
effort
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for effort
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 for cooking.
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, some families frequently go to
the
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cafes, restaurants and McDonald’s as they do not give their preference to prepare
food
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 since lack of time widespread among their life. The reason for that
they
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is they
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 always work all day long
hence
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 they will be fatigued. The second ground is laziness and boredom in
people
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’s life. As an example, swarms of
people
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 reckon cooking is prohibitively boring
due to
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this
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 they tend to
sedentary
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a sedentary
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 lifestyle.
Moreover
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, human beings are getting vitally lazy which means they do not have any desire to make a
food
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Additionally
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, others do advocate eating at
home
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 and the hypothesis
which
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apply
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they bring to protect their idea is that being at
home
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 and
spend
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spending
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 time with family members. As an explanation,
majority
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the majority
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people
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of people
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 have a colossal desire to consume meals with
whole
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the whole
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 family and
having
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have
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conversation
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conversations
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 by heart. The other reason is that many individuals prefer
food
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 made by their
mother
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mothers
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 as it is the most delicious in the world.
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 a number of
people
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 agree
to eat
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that eating
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home
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at home
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 is more beneficial.
To conclude
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although
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, many
people
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 opine
about
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that
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 eating out is more convenient
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apply
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while
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, others say homemade meals are the best and
beneficial
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most beneficial
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. I discussed both sides in the previous paragraphs and
i
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I
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 vitally agree with
people
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 who eat at
home
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.
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Main points are well supported, with reasons provided for each argument which shows good coherence.

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