The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and marker comparisons where relevant

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The given graph represents the number of visitors who explored four attractions in Brighton, an art

Gallery

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, pavilion, pier, and festival in England between 1980 and 2010.

Overall

it is clear that

the

percentage

visiting the pavilion and the pire increased over the period.

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the proportion of

travelers

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to other attractions fell.

To begin

with, in 1980 only 10% of tourists went to

pire

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which rose

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to 15% in 1985 and started fluctuating from 1985 to 2000. From the end of 2000, the

percentage

uplifted slightly throughout the years.

Furthermore

, the Pavilion was the most popular attraction for tourists, in the initial year the

percentage

was approximately 25%.

Hence

, the

percentage

of pavilions skyrocketed to almost 50% in 1995. Again, it started to decline and

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31% in 2010. As for art galleries and festivals, the former was 21% in 1980 and went up to around 39% in 1985. After 1985 the

percentage

started to reduce

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over the following year which was less than 10% in 2010.

Additionally

, FestivalsFestivals stayed moderately similar between the former and the latter 30% in 1985 and 29% in 2010.

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