The maps show the outskirts of the town of Fosbury in 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The maps show the outskirts of the town of Fosbury in 1980 and 2015.  

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The 35-year period saw
changes
to the suburban
area
of the town of Fosbury and the urban developments that took place there.
Overall
, there were a number of
changes
to the buildings and amenities of
this
area
. In terms of the road layout, the main change was the modernization of the road by developing the roundabout. In 1980
this
area
had a combination of residential and industrial features, but by 2015 two-thirds of residential features had disappeared. The residential accommodation in the northwest underwent
further
changes
with blocks of flats and terraced houses, which were replaced by commercial buildings. The
area
industrialized
further
during
this
period; the fields have been replaced by warehouses. The
area
’s sporting facilities have
also
been developed into a sports centre.
Finally
, the new amenities
such
as car parks had erupted. In summary, the
area
of Fosbury shown on the maps went through a lot of
changes
between 1980 and 2015. The number of recreational buildings in the
area
has increased, but the number of houses has reduced.
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