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The table below shows the table made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the table made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table
chart
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 shows the table made by a
coffee
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 shop in an office building on a typical weekday. As you can see obviously, it is noticeable that the
coffee
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 shop made a lot of
coffee
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 for the entire day.
Whereas
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, a lot of
sandwiches
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 were sold in the late morning and in the late afternoon especially. And the other products were sold in each time zone steadily. In the first
bar
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chart
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, the
coffee
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 shop made 265
coffee
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, 110
tea
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, 275
pastries
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 and 50
sandwiches
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 from 7:30 to 10:30 and in the second
bar
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chart
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, there were 185
coffee
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, 50
tea
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, 95
pastries
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 and 200
sandwiches
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 from 10:30 to 2:30. In the third
bar
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chart
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, there were 145
coffee
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, 35
tea
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, 150
pastries
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 and 40
sandwiches
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 from 2:30 to 5:30 and in the firth
bar
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chart
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, there were 200
coffee
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, 75
tea
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, 80
pastries
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 and 110
sandwiches
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 from 5:30 to 8:30. To summarise, it seems that people are willing to drink
coffee
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 and eat breads
such
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 as
pastries
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 and
sandwiches
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 anytime a day in an office building on a typical weekday.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 91%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, coffee, sandwiches, bar, tea, pastries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • peak hours
  • typical weekday
  • busiest period
  • least busy period
  • sales volume
  • time intervals
  • items sold
  • employee preferences
  • observable patterns
  • anomalies
  • trends
  • dips
  • spikes
  • data analysis
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