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The supplied bar chart above represents the data about people living in rural, urban and town who born in Australia or outside of state between 1995 and 2010.

The supplied bar chart above represents the data about people living in rural, urban and town who born in Australia or outside of state between 1995 and 2010.
The histogram shows the number of people born in rural, urban and township
areas
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 in
Australia
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 or out of state between 1995 and 2010. In
general
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general,
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 we can see that the number of people born in
Australia
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 in a city has changed quite dramatically. The population in urban
areas
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 increased from 50 to 65, which is not the case for towns and rural
areas
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, which decreased by almost half. To summarize the
birth
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rate
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 in
Australia
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, we can say that people living in towns and rural
areas
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 have moved to cities over
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 period of time. If we look at
birth
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 rates outside
Australia
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. We can say that
according to
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 the data, the
birth
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rate
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 in the city increased by 20, and the
birth
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rate
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 in rural
areas
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 decreased by 4 times. And the
birth
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rate
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 in towns
also
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 decreased by half.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words areas, australia, birth, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Demographics
  • Migration patterns
  • Population distribution
  • Rural
  • Urban
  • Town
  • Native-born
  • Foreign-born
  • Growth rate
  • Settlement patterns
  • Residential categories
  • Urbanization
  • Infrastructure
  • Economic opportunities
  • Lifestyle preferences
  • Residential mobility
  • Urban planning
  • Governmental policies
  • Community impact
  • Data analysis
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